Friday, 21 September 2012

100 word challenge - Callum, Dom and William

We were just sitting down for dinner when... suddenly we heared a knocking on the door which was becaming louder and louder and louder by the second!!! Suddenly a green fist which was on fire burst through the wooden door. The fist was coverd in flaiming hot fire whitch made the wooden door  burn to ash and was then a swarm of fire spiders.My mum panicked, grabbed her broom out and batterd some of the vicious spiders. She kept going till they fled the house and never returned again!

3 comments:

  1. I like the idea of a swarm of fire spiders.

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  2. Super punctuation guys. Exclamation marks and ellipses make your writing far more interesting to the reader.

    Ross Davidson
    Colchester

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