Friday, 21 September 2012

100 word challenge - Emily Jayne

We were just sitting down for dinner when there was a knock on the door.as soon as we opened the door there stood the king and queen of England . They announced a "hello "in a nice warm voice.  Then we all bowed to the king and and shouted"HELLO!". The king said "Who are you as he?" as he grabbed for his sword. All they wanted was something to eat, but now they started to worry....

2 comments:

  1. Emily,

    This is an interesting post. I don't know what I would do if the King and Queen of England knocked on my door. Was there something for them to worry about?

    Be sure to double check your writing for repeated words ("and and", "as he . . . as he")

    Good work. I look forward to your next challenge.

    Dr. Lisa (Team 100WC)

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  2. Morgan, St. John Vianney26 September 2012 at 11:23

    Emily,
    This was a fun post to read because I have never thought of what I would ever do if the King and Queen of England showed up at my door. The only mistake I see in this is repeating words. Other than that, I don't see anything wrong with this. Keep up the good work!

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